Oct13

Straight Street: Rough Waters [ A Ballad]

Posted on Oct 13, 2015 by Marren

Rough Seas

Decaying network of evil, see them
breathe their diseased work on the
ideal impressionable young yoke.
Family values are weak from assaults
day in and week out from terrible gossip.

When weed is your best friend,
the deed is almost done. Help!
Is that the keys, handed down to
Eve, to multiply fruits to torture others?
Who made those community legal?

Stop, you cannot weasel your way
through my needle of choice.
Please, leave my different ways, different.
Let me be, be me. Free to choose only three
as friends because mama said 3 is a crowd
and I just want to stay out of trouble.

Day 7 of WordPress poetry class with the ‘Ballad.’ For our prompt today, Neighbours and the literary device ‘Assonance.’ My poem speaks on my interpretation of the place, I call community. Sadly it is a negative but the truth shall set me free, yes free indeed.

As always, I leave you with the other poems from class: Day 1, Day 2,Day 3, Day 4, Day 5 and Day 6.

I leave you with a question: Do you live in a neighbourhood where you notice a slow decay (people mannerisms etc), does it bother you? Would you mind telling me about it, in the section below?

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Kathy on Oct 13, 2015 at 8:06 am said:

Yes, there is a slow decay to some houses in our neighborhood. It’s expensive to live in NJ and some people can’t afford to fix up the house, including us. Our fence will not survive another hurricane. Hoping one day this will change for us.

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- Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:42 am said:
  
  Hey Kathy, I can imagine how expensive it can be living near the sea bed. Not only damages from Hurricanes but the effect of rust from the sea breeze. We experience hurricane damage every year in the Caribbean and my homeland St. Lucia in the last few years felt it bad. The world economy depression does not help at all. It looks bleak. sigh.
  
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SabahBatul. on Oct 13, 2015 at 8:54 am said:

That is a very well described reality of our neighborhood!! Well done 😀

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- Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:50 am said:
  
  Isn’t it sad how the value of community is receding. I appreciating you stopping by with your feedback Sabah.
  
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  - SabahBatul. on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:51 am said:
    
    No problem…yes,it is really sad…But I hope it gets better from here!
    
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  - Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:54 am said:
    
    To be honest, my hope is slim but I hope the generations to come have something better.
    
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  - SabahBatul. on Oct 13, 2015 at 10:16 am said:
    
    Yes..*fingers crossed* 🙂
    
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Melinda Kucsera on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:23 am said:

No decay here but I live in a neighborhood of coop and condo developments. HOA’s keep them up and some of them are simply gorgeous.

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- Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:51 am said:
  
  Look at you Melinda, in your fancy neighbourhood, can I come for a swim?
  
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  - Melinda Kucsera on Oct 13, 2015 at 10:06 am said:
    
    We don’t have a pool, I’m sorry, but the town house community at the top of the hill does. Maybe we can sneak in? 😉 Though maybe not. They keep their pool under lock and key.
    
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  - Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 10:58 am said:
    
    *whispers* We can find a way to sneak in, hehe but I do not want to risk you getting kicked out, so I better not put you at risk.
    
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  - Melinda Kucsera on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:36 am said:
    
    I tried all summer to befriend someone within that complex just for a swim and a peek into their town houses. Maybe if we tag team them we’ll get an in!
    
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  - Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:40 am said:
    
    Then Melissa, we gotta James Bond over there, lol..To swim or not to swim, haha
    
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  - Melinda Kucsera on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:43 am said:
    
    it’s Melinda, but yes or we can pull a mission impossible on that pool!
    
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  - Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 12:38 pm said:
    
    I am sorry, I saw Melinda, yet I wrote Melissa 😦 *embarrassed*
    
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  - Melinda Kucsera on Oct 13, 2015 at 12:40 pm said:
    
    That’s ok. It won’t happen again 😉
    
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  - Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 12:40 pm said:
    
    Promise 🙂
    
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  - Melinda Kucsera on Oct 13, 2015 at 1:50 pm said:
    
    🙂
    
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jacquelineobyikocha on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:42 am said:

Another theme just like mine. Where I am right now, there is no decay at all. The development is mind boggling and first rate architecture, that is Dubai. However, I can think of a few places that have quite a bit of rot back in my home country.

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- Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:53 am said:
  
  Oh you live in perhaps the Architecture central! The videos and photographs of buildings in Dubai always amaze me. Is it still hot?
  
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  - jacquelineobyikocha on Oct 13, 2015 at 10:11 am said:
    
    Cooling down gradually in the evenings, but still pretty warm in the afternoons. Yes, we stay in the architectural central but I go foraging around the old city a lot too 😉 Thank you for visiting today. I appreciate your words.
    
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  - Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:00 am said:
    
    Heat, is perhaps one of the unattractive things about Dubai for me. I have had it on my list of places to visit for a long time but I want to go in the coolest month there.
    
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  - jacquelineobyikocha on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:21 am said:
    
    I agree with you. From November till February/March I hear are the coolest months. I was here in December when we came to have a look see and it was quite cool and fun 🙂
    
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  - Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:24 am said:
    
    Ahhh, these are also the coolest months in the Caribbean as well. Thank you for the heads up.
    
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  - jacquelineobyikocha on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:26 am said:
    
    Hmm! Now that sounds like a tussle in the mind. You are most welcome 😉
    
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nyonglema on Oct 13, 2015 at 11:43 am said:

Oh no…it’s a shame some neighbourhoods are that way..;some are great though! Nice piece!

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- Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 12:39 pm said:
  
  It is a crying shame. I appreciate the feedback Nyonglema.
  
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Dreamer of Dreams on Oct 13, 2015 at 1:41 pm said:

The metaphor lurking within your poem, and your use of assonance are both lovely!
These lines, “Stop, you cannot weasel your way
through my needle of choice” roll satisfyingly off the tongue, when one reads them aloud.
Well-done!

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- Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 10:14 pm said:
  
  Cheers Dreamer, I love how you dissected your feedback. I am humbled by such acclaim :).
  
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ryanbestre on Oct 13, 2015 at 9:20 pm said:

What happened to communities where people actually know and talk to each other?

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- Noirfifre on Oct 13, 2015 at 10:16 pm said:
  
  Ryan, I been asking myself the same question for a long time. It is a thing of the past for many community. It is a sad reality.
  
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